From the files of the pretend poet, mid-October 2018… ardisson.org

@vasta Thanks, Sameer; it was an amazing moment when it popped into my head, catching my breath a little; I’m pleased to hear that it provokes a similarly powerful response in readers. (I’d been doing some reading on the Punic Wars recently, so I think that’s what had put “salt” in my subconscious). I wish I could say the rest of the poem is a good as that first stanza… :-)

@smokey that remind me, during you micro.blo absence I started enjoying Smokey | Poets of the Café.

@johnjohnston Glad you enjoyed it, John. (That reminds me, I really wanted to do some work on that page for the 20th anniversary…I guess I still have a few months left.)

@smokey this gave me spine tingles (in a good way!)

@schuth Thanks, William; it is especially validating to hear such things from someone who works in poetry professionally. I must admit, though, that I did not put quite that degree of thought into it (or perhaps I would have searched for something that kept the rhythm going a little better in that penultimate line; it drags a bit there, but I guess your point about the justaposition balances that). I did want a short line to punctuate the stanza, and “Salted” felt like a figurative bold period with which to do so.

@aclaman Thank you, Alex. (Perfect for October, I guess!)